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Post by Mstrgmr on Aug 29, 2005 6:37:35 GMT -5
I fixed errors for you. I also capitalized all of the attacks because you did some but not all of them. I also made the part where he finds out Pander is his roomate easier to understand. If you want it changed back I will do that for you.
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Post by Nonameletdown on Aug 29, 2005 10:35:20 GMT -5
I fixed errors for you. I also capitalized all of the attacks because you did some but not all of them. I also made the part wheree he finds out Pander is his roomate easier to understand. If you want it changed back I will do that for you. You might want to edit your own post too ;D haha. But thanks though
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Post by Mstrgmr on Aug 29, 2005 17:14:13 GMT -5
Sorry I was rushing because I had to leave.
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Post by Nonameletdown on Aug 29, 2005 17:15:24 GMT -5
sokay
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Post by Nonameletdown on Aug 29, 2005 17:18:53 GMT -5
Chapter Six-- Third Encounter
The salt water awoke Peter from his deep sleep. When he arose, he found himself on a beach, next to a man pulling a life raft. He couldnt see who it was, since his vision was not vivid at the time.
"Where am I?" asked Peter in a weak voice, feeling around his surroundings.
"Man, that explosion must'a knocked you out good," replied the man.
Peter recognized that voice... or at least he thought he had. It definetly sounded familiar. He stroked his hand through his dark brown hair while trying to remember who the man was.
"Pander? Is that you?" asked Peter. When he asked those words, his vision became vivid. "What happened?"
Pander explained to Peter what happened. When Peter was knocked out, Pander helped him onto a lifeboat. Many of the other lifeboats already landed on the shores of Pallet or Vermillion. Peter thanked Pander, and their roads split apart once more.
Peter got his backpack, and started to head to Professor Oaks lab, which was closed because of some activity taking place.
Hr started walking around, wondering of what to do. Then he spotted a girl who was being harassed by people who were in the same clothes as the robbers.
"Man, these guys just love to follow me..." said Peter under his breath while running to hide behind a bush.
"Look... just give me your Pokémon, and I'll leave you alone," said the theif.
"Look, I already said I dont have any... so can I go now?" asked the girl.
"NO! You're lying!"
"Squirtle, use tackle on that robber for me," asked Peter.
Squirtle nodded and leaped through the bushes, and onto the theif. The man in robes fell a couple feet from the impact. When the robed one arose from his fall, he looked at Peter, who was stooping behind a bush, and grinned.
"You... I remember you, kid... kid from Vermillion," said the dark robed man, staring at Peter. Peter arose to his feet.
"Who are you people?" asked Peter in a demanding voice.
"We are an organization that steals Pokémon," replied the man in a yuppie voice.
"It took Einstein to figure that?" asked Peter under his breath.
"And I am here to battle you."
The girl arose from her feet and stood on the sidelines. Peter called Squirtle to draw back.
"Go Arcanine!" yelled the darked robed one as he threw his Pokéball. "Use Flamethrower!"
A burst of flame shot out of Arcanine's mouth. Instinctively, Squirtle rolled on the ground to dodge.
"Good job! Now leap and use Bubble!" shouted Peter.
Squirtle leaped into the air and shot bubbles through his mouth.
"Arcanine, dodge!" Arcanine dodged the stream of bubbles.
"Squirtle shoot in the air!"
The robber was confused and didnt have time to react to what happened. Squirle shot a bloomful of bubbles into the air and soon the whole stadium was covered in bubbles. Arcanine was hurt badly, and it started retreating step by step.
"Now tackle it into the ocean!"
Squirtle leapt and hit its' target directly, and the Arcanine fell into the ocean. The robber recalled Arcanine.
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Post by Nonameletdown on Aug 29, 2005 17:21:39 GMT -5
I need to write more quicker! Im working on my 9th chapter and Im already on chapter 6 here!
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Post by Mstrgmr on Aug 29, 2005 17:22:36 GMT -5
Well when you start school if you get free time you can do it then.
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Post by Nonameletdown on Aug 29, 2005 17:23:52 GMT -5
Yeh... true
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Post by Nonameletdown on Aug 30, 2005 2:42:58 GMT -5
Chapter Seven--Familiar Friend
"This isnt over, you know," said the robber. "Soon you will be covered by so many of us, that you wont even be able to call your Pokémon out!"
After saying that, the robber ran North. The girl then walked to Peter, astonished in such a battle.
"Thank you for saving me, but I have to rush. I need to head to Professors' lab!" said the girl as she began to run to the lab. Peter began to run too.
"Isnt it closed?" Peter asked, while regaining his breath during the jog. The girl didnt reply.
The two finally reached Oak's labratory out of breath. After catching his breath, Peter looked up and saw the astonishment of the Great Oak's labratory. Rows of books stacked in shelves. Miles of Pokéballs in slots.
"You're late Ashley," said Professor Oak. The echo went for miles through the halls.
"Sorry sir. I was being robbed, but this boy saved me," replied Ashley.
The professor stood up, and smiled and nodded at Peter.
"Well, fortunately I still have some left. Come along," said the Professor.
The three walked into the hallow corridor, while Professor Oak asked questions to Ashley.
"So how's your father going along?" asked the professor.
"He's fine. He's really happy that I'm following in his footsteps to be a Pokémon master," replied Ashley.
"I should visit him sometime... havent talked to Ash in ages. And how is Misty?"
"Still taking care of the gym. I dont see why Aunt Daisy, Violet, nor Lily cant take care of it. Oh well..."
Peter wondered if this was the Ash as his mother, May, talked about before. His mother always told Peter and Lance stories of her first love, Ash Ketchum, the Pokémon master.
"Okay Ashley, choose any of these nine Pokémon," said Professor Oak, when they arrived at a certain area of the lab. As Peter glanced around, it was just like his school. Under each Pokéball was a name. Peter thought it would be interesting if she chose a Squirtle too.
"Ive been deciding all day, and I think I'll choose a Cyndaquil," said Ashley.
Professor Oak handed Ashley a Pokédex, and a few Pokéballs.
"Have fun catching, and say hi to your father the next time you see him!" said Professor Oak.
"I forgot to properly introduce myself. Im Peter," said Peter as they were exiting from Oaks lab.
"Oh, and I am Ashley Ketchum from Pallet Town," said Ashely while shaking Peters hand. "And thank you again for saving me back there. Good thing he didnt jump me after I got Cyndaquil."
"No problem, that guy also tried to rob my Squirtle after I just got it. So you need a travelling buddy, because I need one?"
Ashley smilied and accepted. The two then headed to Ashley's house to get some food and other supplies. As they entered the house, Ashley introduced Peter to her father Ash, who was home at the time.
"Good to meet you, sir," said Peter while shaking Ash's hand.
"Have I met you before? You look familiar," Ash asked.
Peter shook his head. After Ashley got supplies, the two headed down the road to to Viridian City.
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Post by Nonameletdown on Aug 31, 2005 16:13:48 GMT -5
Chapter Eight--Common Courtesy
Peter and Ashley left Pallet town and began heading to Viridian. Ashley was a very curious girl. She asked Peter many questions, such as where he came from, who his parents were, and other miscellanious questions that people ask to new friends. The thing that really got her was that Peter went to school, and didnt have to battle any gym leaders. She remembers her Dad, Ash, talking about such schools once, but she was still interested in it.
While talking, they came upon a Weedle. Peter wanted it bad, but when he looked at Ashley, he decided to be more courteous to her.
"Ladies first," said Peter. He had no clue why he said that. Normally, if it was any other girl, he would take his share, and then be courteous later. But there was something special about Ashley that Peter did not understand.
"Thank you," Ashley said sweetly. When she smiled, Peter got all fuzzy. Another thing he couldnt comprehend.
"Go Cyndaquil!" Ashley yelled as she threw her Pokéball out. "Um...," she thought out loud. Her mind went blank, and she forgot what attacks Cyndaquil had.
Cyndaquil turned its' head toward Ashley and started scratching its' head.
Peter understood what was happening, so he whispered, "Try Tackle."
"Oh, thanks," whispered Ashley to Peter. "Tackle Cyndaquil!"
Cyndaquil jumped onto all four feet and tackled the Weedle. With one hit, Weedle was knocked out. Ashley threw her Pokéball at Weedle. Once Weedle went into the ball, it wiggled to try get free... but it ceased after a few tries.
"Yes! Thank you again Peter," said Ashley in her excitement. "Sorry you couldnt get one."
"Its' okay, I can probably catch one in the forest," replied Peter.
After saying that, a Nidoran male and female popped out of the tall grass nearby.
"Or I can catch one right now," said Peter with a smile. "Go Squirtle! Use tackle!"
As Squirtle came out of the Pokéball, it leapt onto the Male Nidoran.
"Cyndaquil, you use tackle too!" shouted Ashley.
Cyndaquil did as its' master ordered. After the two Nidorans were stunned, they both arose. Both of them also switched enemies. Male Nidoran leapt in the air and pierced his horn against Cyndaquil's arm. Cynadquil began to cry. Female Nidoran ran to Squirtle and scratched its' shell. When the female Nidoran realized it couldnt make a scratch on Squirtles shell, she looked up and saw Squirtle grinning.
"Use Bubble Squirtle!" Peter commanded.
As the Female Nidoran was looking at her enemy, Squirtle shot a burst of bubbles into Female Nidoran's face. The female Nidoran fell to the ground and fainted. As Peter got a Pokéball and was about to throw it when Ashley threw her ball and caught the female Nidoran. Peter looked at Ashley strangely.
"Oh, you wanted that? Im sorry, I thought you wanted the male," said Ashley.
"Oh, okay. You can battle it," replied Peter.
Ashley nodded, and again commanded Cyndaquil to attack the male Nidoran. After a few tackles, Nidoran was knocked out, and Peter caught his Pokémon. The two celebrated their victory.
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